The things we need to improve on ( First draft analysis)

Having done our first draft we have noticed a lot of mistakes and areas where we can improve, as well as what we have done well and what we have done badly.

The first area where we can improve is right at the start when we turn off the alarm. We do a close up shot of the alarm and knock it off the table when it comes off, but in the next shot the alarm is back on the table. This takes the point of the guy being angry that his alarm is going off and that he chucks it on the floor to make no sense. One minute it has been chucked on the floor and the next it is back on the table. When we come to film this bit for our final piece we have to make sure that things are exacly how we left it. If we move something in the shot then we have to make sure we dont move.it back untill we are done.

There is also the problem of the all the different clocks within the music video showing different times. This can make it seem un realistic but what was worse was the fact that one shot the time could be 15:00, and then a few shots later it will be midday. So we need to make sure that if we do have a shot when a clock is within the shot, then we have to make sure we either change the times so that they go in order, or we try and get rid of any shots of a clock within the shots. The only times I want the time or the clock to be shows is during the alarm clock shot and when we are filming the lyrics on the phone.   

The next thing we need to improve is how long some of the shots are. In order to keep the attention of the audience, each shot has to be short and quick, and the problem we had was that ours was quite long and so we are risking the fact that we might be losing their attention. We want each shot to match what is said within the lyrics which is what we did in our first draft however we only showed one clip and so that clip was quite long. Some shots need to be quite long because of the fact that we are trying to act out what the lyrics are saying, but for our chorus part we can add multiple shots.

There are some shots which we have done which sometimes don't make a lot of sense. For example near the beginning of the filming we have a clip where our actor is sitting on the sofa watching TV. During one shot he is in his normal clothes, and then the next he is sitting in a onesie on a different part of the sofa. I think in order to do this we need to add something to help the audience understand the reason why they changed. We could add something like the singer clicking his fingers to show that there is a change about to happen.

Another thing we need to improve is what the singer is wearing. This is mainly mise-en-scene. One big mistake we made was the fact that at the start of the first draft the singer when he gets out of bed is wearing normal clothes. He isn't wearing what someone of our target audience would wear if they went to bed. Whats worse is the fact that the stuff that he wears when getting out of bed is what he wears for the rest of the video. This doesn't make it seem very realistic and it doesn't show a good use of miss-en-scene. For the real thing we need to make sure that the costume is different during this part.

Lazy Song First Draft

Filming 14/10/13

This is the date where me and my partner did a majority of our filming. The only thing we need to film after this date is the outside parts which are the chorus. We realise this is our first draft, and so we wanted to concentrate on the possible things that could go wrong and how we could improve them in our first draft. It also gave us a chance to realise what we actually need in terms of props and actors. I think some parts we will need to re shoot because of the fact we can simply do it slightly better. Some of the shots that we did were quite good and we will probably use the same angles in our real thing that we did in our final draft. 

When it comes to filming our chorus, we will be doing it outside and so the lighting will be a lot easier to control in order to see everything. With the parts inside the house we found it hard to keep the lighting the same but we think for a draft we did a pretty good job and we did learn about the importance of it.

When it comes to filming the last remaining bits we know what sort of angles we want to do and we know how to go about filming it. We want to film as many shots as we can, as that way we will have more choice to use when it comes to making the video. We are also using the draft to learn how to use Imovie, and get used to all the features that it has to offer. 

filming 9/10/13

We did the first part of our filming today, in order to make our first draft music video. However we didnt follow the schedule completly. Instead of filming the chorus bit forst we filmed the first part of the song. Thw feason for thisnis because the sun was quite low outside, and so because of that it would have been quite hard to film. We filmed up to the point where the first chorus comes in. We filmed a variary of shots and so when it comes to editing we have a number of shots that we can use and choose what we want.

We will continue with the rest of the filming on Sunday. The reason why we cant do it on other days is because of availability of me and my partner, but also because of the cost of petrol. Me and my partner during the week, would have to go from school to my house to pick up the camera, then to his house, then back to mine and then to school. This is a lot of milage, and that would cost a lot in petrol. And because we are both free all day sunday, we think we will be able to film the rest during the day.